Editors Say first & second draft

Initially I was quite unsure of what pages to create for my 4 pages of a regional fashion magazine, however after research & planning I have since decided to create an 'Editors Say' page as magazines that I have looked at such as Vogue & Company include an editors letter in every magazine issue. I decided to change the name in my magazine to 'Editors Say' because it shows that I am using my own thoughts & ideas as well as challenge & develop conventions of real media products. I wanted to create an interesting page, slightly different to the other magazines and their way of approaching the page, therefore I decided to experiment with typography and present my writing in the shape of the letter 'R' standing for 'Rare'. I used aspects from other magazines such as including social networking addresses, so my target audience can keep in touch, and because of their age range social networking appeals to their interests. I really like my chosen layout because everything fits in well together, the text is a brief description about what this months issue includes and what can be found in the magazine, as well as briefly discussing the vintage theme that is shown throughout this one off edition. The image on the left is the first draft of my editors say page, and since receiving feedback from my teacher I have made the requested changes to make the page look more professional and of better quality, I slightly changed the colour of the title to make it brighter and stand out, as well as change the grammar to make it correct by adding the apostrophe. I also made slight adjustments such as reducing the size of my page number and social network icons, and change the position of my subscription advertisement to make it stand out more by highlighting it with circles, similar to an advertisement I saw in the magazine Company. Overall I am really pleased with how this page has turned out after making the slight adjustments that were suggested by my teacher, however I plan on receiving audience feedback so I can find out what my target audiences opinion is on the page and if it appeals to them or if they would change anything about it.